In your section 'My PC Builds offer many advantages.....' section, you say
'Branded quality used components'
which is a rather clumsy and ambiguous phrase IF you mean you only use ' quality,branded components' - and confused me at least.[maybe that's not difficult].The 'copy' in general could perhaps do with work but I like the overall design.
Yes I build new PC's using new components, of which will only be branded...i.e Crucial,Western Digital.
Clumbsy it maybe, but you know wat it is like when you type, you always think that you're grammar/spelling is right. Iam sorry if Iconfused, it isnot intentional, just a slur...sorry! I shall ammend at the next upload!
Please explain the 'copy' in general part...you lost me ...not hard i know!
'copy'=text. Probably me being picky but I feel[and obviously merely an opinion as worthless as anyone's] it needs a little polish for it to 'read'as one would expect on a professional business site.Your English[no offence intended] is a little quirky and a little at odds with the nice design and a high-tech product.As a customer,it would raise suspicion that perhaps you weren't really a professional outfit.
Please don't be offended or put out - you did ask for opinions and that's my impression.
Leo49 strongwords...but hey I think Iam man enough to take it.
Yes ok, point taken...but on the flip side would my customers ather feel that Iam a down to earth person who they can communicate with, or a jumped up make sure every word is perfect twirp. Now that isn't a jibe back at you, but I put it on what Iam all about, that is all part of me, you may say un-professional...I say honest and down to earth. I agree I could have payed someone toclea/edit my text. For me to be perceived as loyal, down to earth, easy to contact,communiate with is far far more important than making sure my words flow as some might want to read it. I am not going off on one, and I really do appreciate your opinion, it's great feedback. Just wanted to keep it true and from m, not some little text editor geek!
No offense honestly intended. Leo49, thanks for your input, perhaps I will see wht others think, and if I get out-voted then I will be forced perhaps to re-address my poor grammar-layout of text.
PS. Doesn't every company strive to be perceived as a bigger outfit than they usually are? It is all about marketing. I have worked with may large companies who have to start off small and young, but boast they are big to perhaps draw in the big fish if you like!
No offence taken or meant. I appreciate your point of view and the qualities you wish to convey.It's a tricky balance to get just right. Let's hope there aren't too many like me amongst your potential customers. :o)